[NDS] Pokémon Black Version & Pokémon White Version - "Title Screen" by goldenscruff

[cashwarrior1]

Did you mean b2 for the LH F? Added the F-C Diad.

No, I meant b3. It's also up an octave, its the lower harmony of the string part on b3-4. I'm hearing a C on b3 in the RH as well and an Ab below the F-C dyad (Did you forget to add this?) on b4.

Those notes are actually the harmony in m0 huh. I swapped the middle two notes of the arpeggio so the melody comes through.

The arpeggio notes shouldn't be swapped around, that takes away from the original and interrupts the movement this moment is supposed to have. There isn't any melody here, its just chords building up tension to transition into the next section.

On formatting:

• I noticed there's a lot of space at the top of each page, is that a setting you can adjust?
• There are multiple spots like m6 where the ties clash with the dotted notes (check the whole sheet for those).
• The dotted half rest in m8 lh can be deleted. In the same measure, the rh trill can be centered over the dotted half note. Also, the decrescendo is a little too close to the barline and note stems.
• The 4th system is a little too close to the 3rd on the 1st page, that can be moved down a bit.
• m13 rh - That grace note feels a little far from the eighth note if you could bring it a little closer. The slur also could be adjusted so its not as close.
• m14 lh b3 - There's dotted quarter note with a dot inside a note, that should be moved and line up with the dot of the note below.
• m23 rh - Could you move the tie so its not going through the note on b4?
• m32 rh - The tie cuts into the notes here too.
• Some of the notes in the 5th system of the 2nd page are quite close to each other, so the entire system could be widened a little.
• It feels a little weird to see a singular eighth note with no rests before it in m35. Are you able to make cross-stave beams? If not, I can do it for that entire section.
• m36 rh - There should be a half rest on b3 for the half note. The eighth rest in the upper layer should be the same as the rest of the measure.
• m55 - Could you center the ritenuto so its more in the middle?