This is very late response but still I remembered this thread so I came back. Thanks for taking the time to give some feedback and also just for listening to it in general!
Dynamic markings for voice parts always go above their staff, this is to avoid collisions with the text. The vocal line is also missing some slur markings, mostly around those held notes.
This is really useful in particular I'll keep this in mind in future.
Based on the range I'm assuming this is best suited for a tenor? If such is the case use a suboctave treble clef for the vocal line. It could also be done with a baritone, but given most of the action is around middle C I'd err on a tenor singing it in this key and range.
Range is a funny one since this is actually entirely in bass, baritone and tenor range with no problems. I've seen Fs asked for in bass parts before frequently. What I mean to say here is that it's really intended for male voice and it's written such that any male singer should be able to get it.
Other than that it's a fun song, and if I still sang I might've given it a go.
Aww singing is great, don't give it up!
The galloping nature makes it a fun patter song, though I can tell it'll take a lot of work to make sure the text isn't muddy at this tempo.
Yep, that's the challenge with this song. I put a tempo marking in but really if you're performing it you should sing it as fast as you possibly can while keeping the words understandable. (Which may end up being slower than the tempo marking, I'd be very impressed by anyone who managed to get it much faster than that.)
I might give this piece a face-lift at some point but I'm so busy at the moment so it'll have to wait for now.
