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« on: October 14, 2018, 08:24:38 AM »
Levi,
I appreciate you being as patient as you are with all these changes, but let me tell you why m. 12 and m. 16 is important to keep the way Lib said.
At this point, you want to keep note movements intervallically. that is, to move from one perfect fifth to another. and to keep those movements visually. There's no better way than the way that Libera has mentioned, and I agree with him. Of course there's the extra accidentals from a natural to a flat in both dyads, but that's a misnomer compared to the clarity that you be getting by heeding her advice.
I don't see anything before the natural'ed C, so best get rid of the courtesy natural in measure 6 isn't really warranted. Just my thought on the whole thing. I'm not sure where the stigma started, but the best route in my mind is to leave it out unless an altered note at least 2 measures before it is different.
I see nothing wrong with m. 10 thru 14. Everything looks in place with the correct accidentals. As with m. 16 and the fortissimo; if that's how the recording has it sounded in dynamic, I'm for it. As far as how the notes themselves are leading into that section, I'll leave that work to Libera.
Overall, how you have it now is completely acceptable from my stance. Those grace notes are fine how they are; those b-double-flats in the grace notes are fine; and the intervallic thing you got going on is fine also. Just change the things that Lib has specified and we'll be in business.
I have no other complaints, yet. Once you get the changes done and Lib gives it the green I'll accept it. Savvy?
Cool, and good work.
