[GCN] Kirby Air Ride - "City Trial Properties Graph" by Greg

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Submission Information:
Series: Kirby
Game: Kirby Air Ride
Console: Nintendo GameCube
Title: City Trial Properties Graph
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Greg

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[Greg]

[Libera]

This looks nice!  Easy to check as well...

-I'd either ditch the 8vb in the first bar and just write that note with the ledger lines or line it up a bit more neatly.  At the moment it looks a bit like an accident.
-I'd cross staff the final note in bar 4.  That way it's more obvious that it should be played with the right hand and also makes it clear how that note relates to the previous right hand chord.
-The bass goes up to a D on beat 2 of bar 4 rather than a G like in the preceding bars.
-The bass at the end of bar 24 sounds like the first two semiquavers are repeated low Gs rather than G D.

Good stuff!

[Greg]

The 8vb is supposed to carry through the whole piece... should I redo it with a bracket instead for clarity? (Doing the whole thing with ledger lines doesn't look great.)

[Libera]

Ah ok.  As you can tell from my misunderstanding, that's not very obvious.  There are other options instead of just writing with ledger lines or using an 8vb for the entire thing, like

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(taken from one of Tobbeh's sheets).  But there are other options, like simply writing 'play left hand octave lower' or whatever.

[Greg]

Alright, done.

There's one more complication, which is the potentially confusing interpretation of the cross-staved note in m.4. I've currently written it with the interpretation that the 8vb should affect it, but I can see people thinking that it should be played without the 8vb. I'm not really sure how to resolve this (aside from changing back to ledger lines, but that looks a lot worse). Curious to see what other people's intuitive interpretations are for that note.

[mastersuperfan]

Alright, done.

There's one more complication, which is the potentially confusing interpretation of the cross-staved note in m.4. I've currently written it with the interpretation that the 8vb should affect it, but I can see people thinking that it should be played without the 8vb. I'm not really sure how to resolve this (aside from changing back to ledger lines, but that looks a lot worse). Curious to see what other people's intuitive interpretations are for that note.

My first thought was that the 8vb doesn't affect it.

[Dudeman]

My first thought was that the 8vb doesn't affect it.

Same. It's only a G, so three ledger lines isn't unreasonable or cluttered in my opinion.

[Latios212]

You could write 3 ledger lines above bass clef, but that'd be a big jump for the left hand. I would recommend writing it at pitch on the top staff (i.e. an octave lower than it is right now).

[Greg]

You could write 3 ledger lines above bass clef, but that'd be a big jump for the left hand. I would recommend writing it at pitch on the top staff (i.e. an octave lower than it is right now).

Sounds good to me.

[Libera]

Final things:

-Not sure if this is what finale did by default, but I think the cross staffing bar 4 would look better with the beam at the normal height of the previous quavers.  Like this:

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-Any chance we could narrow the composer down from four people?

[Greg]

• Done.
• I looked around, but didn't have any luck finding the individual composer for this particular track.

[Libera]

Sweet!

[Latios212]

Looks great!

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