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I think I previously checked this when it was submitted well over a year ago initially, but let's see if we can get this up on site for this cycle:
Notes
• m17-24 LH top layer - this figure (both beat 1 and beat 2) should be just like the one in the RH from m13-16 - the last note is not an 8th, but two 16ths. Just like before, E, and F# 16th's instead of an 8th note E
• m12 RH the last 8th note you have in this measure is actually two sixteenths, the current E, followed by a C#
• m16 RH second note note hearing the G# in this cluster
• m20 couple things: The lower layer LH notes are C#'s not Dn, and I think the RH middle pitches should be C#'s as well here
• m44 same feedback as m20 (for both hands)
• m25-26, m29-30 LH maybe you could add a bottom note, for example at m25 a G# below the B#. It sounds like there is one there, and this would be easily reachable.
• m27 the D# sounds more like a Dn to me
• m37 LH first quarter note is 8th note length, followed by anotehr C# 8th note.
• m41-47 LH same feedback as m17-24 applies here
-Sony Computer Entertainment should be added as publisher to the copyright info
I am sure that this doesn't need to be said but you need to put the arranger information back onto the sheet for us to accept it. There's no need to draw the process out further by making changes that we are obviously going to need to have reversed before acceptance.
Everything else looks good.
Wouldn't it then make sense to omit the string line instead, since the clarinet has the melody and is more in the foreground?
I personally think it still fits, as it doesn't interfere with the measure below that much:
If you'd really rather keep those things as is, that's fine too of course. There's just one other tiny thing I noticed: the mf in m8 could be raised a bit, so it's centered with the crescendo before.
I believe this discussion has happened before, so I won't go too much into it, but site-consistency and clarification for if the sheet is shared outside of NSM are our main reasons to keep the instrument name at the start.
Most of these are really quiet, but from a pianist's perspective, it would make sense to have them there for a more flowing piece, and the slightest hint of them being there is enough for me to have them included. The fact that they're quieter is an interpretative consequence of the piano player, and most likely not a decision made by the composer of the piece.
m4: There's another Bn in the R.H. an octave above the current one, from the clarinet/flute-y melody.
m5-6: I hear some extra harmonies in the strings here too (mostly same in m7-8 as well):
Since you intended this piece to be played with pedal, maybe you could add "con pedale" at the start? Also, just for midi playback, you could stop the pedal marking at the last measure before beat 4, so the playback won't hold the notes for the full bar.
Also, don't forget the instrument name at the start :p
