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At m11 this is more what I was intending for the segno to be positioned like (before and after pictured just move the segno left a bit)

I'd center the Segno above the double bar, but I'm unable to move it using Finale Notepad. Please help me on this later

Somewhere along the line this was lost, m26 RH 3.0 is supposed to be a Dn

Oops. Fixed that now

[RH]

m40 there's a weird thing. A# Bn C# is the harmony originally, but it's A#^, F#, C#. Last note is only in original octave. Hearing an ascending rhythm though instead of descending, though inner part almost sounds like it's descending.

I kept it as is since I'm not hearing that. Also the F#-A# tenth interval on b1 would be hard to play if A# Bn C# is used

RH m81 Dn 1.0 you could add a tenuto given the original holds out through the measure, also showing this note isn't a part of the same line as 1.5-3.5.
LH m52 1.0 you could add a tenuto given the original holds out through the measure

I change these two to match m93-94

m91 2.0 hearing F# instead of An

I'd keep it as An since other pieces with the same motif has the same note there

m36 3.0 hearing a C# above current notes

After hearing this section again, I decide to only add C#4 and not C#5 for b2-3 to follow the descending melody in other pieces

RH
m69 not hearing the C#'s
m85 RH A little conflicted here, but since this measure is a G major chord, I think the following middle notes work a little better per beat: Bn, An, Gn

LH
m16 2.0 it sounds like the accordion plays a C# above the G# here.
m39 3.0 G# instead of En

Updated

Updated the file with the changes, thanks!

I'm hearing the Dn in m26 as part of the melody line, up an octave from top Dn in LH. As for m36 it sounds like the accordion goes up an octave.

I see. Updated both

The C# is only an 8th note currently

Oops. Fixed

• m16 LH beat 2-3 I heard G# and C# instead of Bn and D#
• m33 RH beat 2 sounds staccatoed
• m46 RH beat 1 I hear an An as well
• m46 LH I think the LH has a bit more pitches than necessary, maybe just Gn on beat and An on 2.5? Honestly they aren't really audible to me though so I'd be fine with just having the RH pitches here
• m63 and m67 LH I hear an An between the D's
• m77 RH not hearing these notes, I think the Bn and Bb on top in the LH are the top pitches.
• m78 RH beat 1 hearing top to bottom: Gn-Dn-Bn, and beat 2 An-En-C#.

All changed. Thanks!

• m11 Segno (return point symbol) - we typically look to have these centered over the barline (can raise it a bit), and the mp could also be moved to the left more, so the symbol's middle aligns with the noteheads above and below it

I can't move the Segno symbol in Notepad. Please help me to move it later

• m26 RH b3 hearing Dn
• m36 RH b3 hearing C# up an octave

I'm not hearing these two, so I kept them as is for now

• m61 RH the Bn sounds to me like it starts on beat 2?

I hear it starts at beat 1 with a crescendo

• I think for the entirety of m1-10 every RH 8th note could be staccatoed.
• m43 RH the F# sounds like it's dotted quarter length, followed by a C# 8th length, and a C# on b3 that ties to an 8th length C# on m44 b1.
• m86 RH 3.5 hearing En above current An
• m94 LH Bb doesn't really fit on top of this C major chord, you could instead replace and add a Cn on top of current notes.

Fixed

Files updated, thanks!

Paper Mario: The Origami King - Toad Town Port

Check this out! https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fo/by1hzod2g1x03qbnr5hge/h?rlkey=gorcnlakdc7lhrs1w2xtce19e&dl=0

The first file has some minor tweaks in addition to some tie/beaming adjustments. But to be honest, I think trying to fit this on one page is not great and I've provided a second file that more naturally spreads it across one and a half pages that I'd highly recommend using instead.

Let's go with the second file then. It looks great to me

-m23: I hear the Ab on beat 1 in the L.H. an octave down, do you think that's still feasible to play as a roll? It might be a bit of a slower roll than in the original in that case.

I adjusted the voicing to keep the original low Ab and make it more feasible to play.

-m15 and 17: The middle tie of beat 2.5 looks like it's clashing with the notes on beat 3.
-m19: The cross-staffed notes in beat 2.5 look a bit misplaced, compared to their standerd position in beat 3.

Also this is something that needs full Finale, but the cross-staff beam in m. 24 should bend upwards.

I can't fix these myself, so please help me make the adjustments to do so.

I'd be happy to help make some visual adjustments to this sheet before we accept it if you and Bloop want some assistance, as there are some minor spacing tweaks and such that could help alleviate the crampedness of this sheet.

Please do!

Updated the files.

[m. 14]

• you could add some arpeggio markings to m. 11 LH beat 2.5, m. 14 LH beat 1, m. 18 beats 1 and 3 (both hands), and m. 21 beat 1 (both hands), but they're not totally required

Added arpeggio markings at m. 11 LH beat 2.5 and m. 21 beat 1, but the horizontal spacing between markings and note need some adjustments that I can't do in Notepad

• m. 14 - idk if this is possible for you, but I would personally raise the 2nd layer rests to the default position (i.e. up 6 steps)
• m. 14 - there's a G playing here too, and if the omission was because adding it seemed a bit too heavy handed, then I think it sounds okay when added as a 5th below the RH

Sounds great, changed

• m. 21 - I think the last Bb is actually two octaves higher, but if you changed it so that the jump in the next measure isn't as large then that's okay too

I didn't changed this since I don't hear the two Bb as a upward interval at all. Still, the decreased jump distance is a valid reason too if the interval is indeed going upwards

This is fine, though you could add a dashed line that shows the movement between staffs, between the Bb on beat 2.5 and the D on beat 3.0

I'm not entirely convinced whether the Bb note belongs to the upper or lower voice, so I keep the first half of measure as single voice

- m8 RH beat 1 I'm not hearing an A, but hearing a G and a C. Technically these are above the D in the LH (and above the staff), but could add them to the RH if you wanted
- m16 RH not hearing the lower F on beat 1

The notes was a octave lower in original and added for a fuller sound. I can't hear the G and C note in m8 at all

- m18 something got messed up with the cross stave stem here, not sure if you have the ability to drag that down?

Nope, Notepad can't do that. Other adjustment for the future:

• Middle ties in m15-17
• m19 beat 2.5 RH note positions (match beat 3?)

- m17 LH play around with the tie tool a little, as the middle tie (for the A) is clipping through the C notehead

I can't fix this myself as I'm using Finale Notepad. Someone would need to do so right before the sheet is accepted

- m18 system could be widdened a little, the m21 dotted qaurter G in the LH almost looks like a staccato under the RH Bb here.

I solved the m21 collision by excluding the RH Bb inside the 8va and thus move the note up

I would suggest a crossbar 8th note like m14 for m26; the Bb in the RH on beat 2.5 technically is followed by the Dn in the LH an 8th beat later. Not inherently a problem but it might be good as far as showing how the actual descending rhythm in the original flows

I don't like crossbar notes that have opposite direction in interval and stave location, so I choose to move the LH notes to upper stave instead

This is supposed to be a replacement sheet, but I can't select this music in the replacement submission form ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

-m46-53: Was there a specific reason you left out the bottom note of the orchestra hits here, compared to m2-9? I think they sound the same

I forgot the reason, but I guess it might be to match the number of notes in chords in m50-51. I've added back those bottom notes now

damn that's a hard to hear measure lol, I hear something like this
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I'm pretty sure about the F on beat 2 and the high C on beat 4, but not 100% about the D-G below in beat 4.

That sounds good to me too

Everything else should be fixed!

Everything should be accounted for ^.^