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Author Topic: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila  (Read 355 times)

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[Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« on: May 10, 2019, 06:46:44 AM »

Submission Information:

Series: Kirby
Game: Kirby's Epic Yarn
Console: Nintendo Wii
Title: Halberd
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Zeila
« Last Edit: July 01, 2019, 01:57:07 AM by Zeila »
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #1 on: May 10, 2019, 06:50:16 AM »

The repeated section is intentionally repeated instead of written out with the extra harmonies to make it easier to play and to save space
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #2 on: May 10, 2019, 11:11:12 PM »

I was hoping you'd submit this! I really like this sheet, excellent work.
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #3 on: May 11, 2019, 12:23:09 AM »

Thank you! It's about time I did it since I've been meaning to do it for a while now...

Also, I noticed that I forgot to update m5 so I went ahead and got rid of the 2nd layer and changed some notes
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #4 on: May 11, 2019, 05:31:16 AM »

I don't know why, but I tried opening your .mus in Finale Notepad 2012 and I kept getting dissonant tubular bells/chimes-like sounds instead of piano.

Actually, I also checked your MIDI and it also sounds like (less dissonant) tubular bells/chimes. As a result, I can't confirm whether your accompaniment sounds accurate, especially its low notes.
« Last Edit: May 11, 2019, 05:34:37 AM by Dekkadeci »
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #5 on: May 11, 2019, 06:33:36 AM »

It's fixed now!
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #6 on: May 11, 2019, 08:38:25 PM »

Yup, sounds fixed now!

Dunno whether it's just Finale Notepad 2012, but the staccatos on the left-hand B flats in Bars 23-26 are touching their respective notes in the .mus, regardless of whether the music is playing. (When the music is playing, the stems of the notes with tremolos flip upside down, to the detriment of readability.) On Page 3 of the .mus, the staccato of the left-hand G flat of Bar 30, the staccato in the right hand and the staccato and accent of the left hand of Bar 34, the last staccato of the right hand of Bar 35, the staccatos of both G's of the right hand of Bar 37, the staccato of the right hand of Bar 38, the staccato of the D and the tenuto of the right hand of Bar 39, the tenutos of the right hand of Bar 40, and all articulation markings of Bars 41-42 also suffer from the same problem.

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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #7 on: May 11, 2019, 08:54:15 PM »

Yup, sounds fixed now!

Dunno whether it's just Finale Notepad 2012, but the staccatos on the left-hand B flats in Bars 23-26 are touching their respective notes in the .mus, regardless of whether the music is playing. (When the music is playing, the stems of the notes with tremolos flip upside down, to the detriment of readability.) On Page 3 of the .mus, the staccato of the left-hand G flat of Bar 30, the staccato in the right hand and the staccato and accent of the left hand of Bar 34, the last staccato of the right hand of Bar 35, the staccatos of both G's of the right hand of Bar 37, the staccato of the right hand of Bar 38, the staccato of the D and the tenuto of the right hand of Bar 39, the tenutos of the right hand of Bar 40, and all articulation markings of Bars 41-42 also suffer from the same problem.

It's finale v26.  The newest version of finale has some fancy articulation placement scheme that corrupts when opened in older finale versions.  It's not a big deal though, since people with v25 (like me) can reset them all very quickly.  I will do that with this sheet before it is accepted, but since it will corrupt again any time Zeila edits the file, there's no point me doing that until the end of the process.  You will notice this exact same problem on other submissions by people who use v26.

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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #8 on: May 16, 2019, 09:23:03 PM »

Wow, this sheet is amazing.
  • I would extend the 8vas in m17 and m31 a tiny bit to the left to cover the first note entirely.
  • I think m15-16 should be notated with sextuplets instead of triplets because the notes are being played in groups of two, rather than in groups of three.
  • I would make the tremolo notes in m2 half notes, or tie them to untremolo'd quarter notes, so as to avoid the quarter-rest gap of silence that's there right now (that isn't in the original).
  • Maybe change the dynamic to mf for m5-6 since the instrumentation changes and it's a bit softer? (And then change back to forte in m7) Like how you change to mf in 19.
  • I think there are some right hand harmonies in m15-16 and m31-32 that are missing.
Overall, I love it! Really looking forward to seeing this one accepted.
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #9 on: May 17, 2019, 11:46:31 PM »

Wow, this sheet is amazing.
  • I would extend the 8vas in m17 and m31 a tiny bit to the left to cover the first note entirely.
Thank you! Done, and I even changed the other 8vas

  • I think there are some right hand harmonies in m15-16 and m31-32 that are missing.
If you're talking about the piano chords, I opted to go for the piano/xylophone melody part + the bass instead. I'm not hearing any harmonies that correlate to the melody part though if that's what you meant

I implemented the other stuff, and also changed the copyright url to https and added staccatos to the eighth notes in m41
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #10 on: May 19, 2019, 11:32:03 PM »

I would also move the sign in m11 to be directly over the double barline. It's a little shifted to the right as is.
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #11 on: May 20, 2019, 11:09:59 PM »

Thanks! I modified it
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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #12 on: June 29, 2019, 10:49:50 PM »

Generally speaking (aside from the v26 articulations) the way this is laid out looks fine to me.  My main concern is the notes, which I've checked through carefully up to bar 19 and this is what I found:

-Missing F# in bar 1.
-Left hand bar 5 second dyad missing An and I think the final chord should be an octave higher.
-Left hand bar 6 the single D on beat 2.25 sounds like an A to me.
-In bar 6 the chord on beat 2.5 should have an An in it and also is kind of awkward to play as written with the left hand crossing over the right.  It might be worth shifting the octaves there to make it a little more intuitive.
-Beat 4 in bar 6 sounds like the dyad should be a semiquaver and then followed by a Bn quaver, rather than what's written.
-Sounds like there's an E on beat 1 of bar 7.
-Missing F# on beat 4.25 in bar 8.
-Bar 9 beat 1 missing B below the C.
-Bar 9 beat 3.75 missing G and possibly a C above the A as well and I don't hear the C below in that chord.
-Bar 9 left hand beat 4.25 missing an A above the C.
-In bar 10 the left hand sounds like it's moving between 3 octaves rather than 2, but admittedly it's kind of hard to make out.  I think as well as the ones you've written in there's also some super low Bns (the lowest on the piano).  Mind taking another look at it?
-Bar 10 beat 1 missing an F# in the right hand I think.
-Kinda sounds like there's a RH Eb on beat 3.25 in bar 10.  Also potentially an F# on beat 4 as well.
-I hear the G on beat 1 of bar 11 an octave lower.
-I'm hearing something a little different for the left hand in bars 11-14.  On the fourth beat of every bar I think there's two semiquavers followed by a quaver rather than just two quaver.  It's fast so it's kind of hard to tell but I think the low note is the second semiquaver and the first is the same octave.
-Missing an A on beat 1 of bar 13.
-There's a lot going on in bars 15-16 that as-is your arrangement fails to capture.  It's clearly impossible to include everything, but adding some of the harmonies from the piano chords to the right
hand notes would go a long way to getting the feel a bit closer.
-Beat 1 of bar 17 should ideally have an Ab in the bass since it's an Ab maj7 chord.
-I'm not convinced on the notes at all in bar 18: I'm hearing Bb-C-D on the first chord rather than Gm and the rest I similarly am not hearing the same.  Mind taking another look at this bit for me?



Before I go on to check the rest of the piece, would you mind having another check through the notes in this piece for me (especially bars 19 onwards)?  I admit that's it's pretty hard to hear at times what's going on but I'm confident we can get a pretty solid level accuracy by the end of this.

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Re: [Wii] Kirby's Epic Yarn - "Halberd" by Zeila
« Reply #13 on: June 30, 2019, 06:08:44 PM »

Thank you for the in depth check! Idk why I didn't notice these things on a second check but I guess that means I should let things sit longer before checking again

-Left hand bar 5 second dyad missing An and I think the final chord should be an octave higher.
In addition to that, I moved the C in the second dyad up an octave. I also left the E in the final chord down an octave because it might be awkward to play the E in the RH after that

-In bar 6 the chord on beat 2.5 should have an An in it and also is kind of awkward to play as written with the left hand crossing over the right.  It might be worth shifting the octaves there to make it a little more intuitive.
I modified both the RH and LH at that part

-Sounds like there's an E on beat 1 of bar 7.
It sounds like this also applies to measure 3. And I think there might be a B in m7 too

-Bar 9 beat 3.75 missing G and possibly a C above the A as well and I don't hear the C below in that chord.
I purposefully moved the C down an octave because it sounded like the melody part was stressed and it seemed like it would be harder to apply that in the sheet music, but I can change that if it works better. I left it as is for now (after adding the G)

-Bar 10 beat 1 missing an F# in the right hand I think.
I'm hearing a low RH Eb instead

-Kinda sounds like there's a RH Eb on beat 3.25 in bar 10.  Also potentially an F# on beat 4 as well.
I think there's an Eb on more than just beat 3.25, but I'm not very confident about the end result. I also don't hear an F# here either

-I'm hearing something a little different for the left hand in bars 11-14.  On the fourth beat of every bar I think there's two semiquavers followed by a quaver rather than just two quaver.  It's fast so it's kind of hard to tell but I think the low note is the second semiquaver and the first is the same octave.
After taking another listen it sounds slightly different than that, but again it's hard to hear so I could be wrong

-Missing an A on beat 1 of bar 13.
It kind of sounds like it's leftover from the previous measure, but I added it anyways

-Beat 1 of bar 17 should ideally have an Ab in the bass since it's an Ab maj7 chord.
I ended up just moving the chord to the RH, Ab included

-I'm not convinced on the notes at all in bar 18: I'm hearing Bb-C-D on the first chord rather than Gm and the rest I similarly am not hearing the same.  Mind taking another look at this bit for me?
Some of the notes sound the same, but otherwise I changed it up a bit

Before I go on to check the rest of the piece, would you mind having another check through the notes in this piece for me (especially bars 19 onwards)?  I admit that's it's pretty hard to hear at times what's going on but I'm confident we can get a pretty solid level accuracy by the end of this.
It took a while, but done. Here's a list of what I changed in m1-19 aside from the other stuff you mentioned:
  • m3 beat 1 added low A in LH
  • m5 beat 3.5 added an A to the LH
  • m8 beats 3 and 4 added G/F and F# to the RH
I also changed some stuff in m19+, like adding and changing some notes in the repeat section as well as modifying the bass part at the end

edit: just realized I exported the pdf to the wrong location, so the original update w/ this post had an outdated version
« Last Edit: July 01, 2019, 01:58:23 AM by Zeila »
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