Walrus CoveAccepted!Snakey Chantey- Move the mf a bit down in the pickup measure so that it's more centered between the RH and LH staves.
- I would recommend writing this in 4/4 with q=232 instead of cut time with h=116. The track feels like it has fast quarter-note beats rather than slow half-note beats.
- IMO the LH is too muddy in such a low register. I would strongly recommend raising the entire LH up an octave and writing it in treble clef (except I would still write the phrase m46-49 in bass clef because the LH goes down to a D in m46-47; i.e. raise m46-49 up an octave like everything else but just keep the bass clef there only).
- In m35/m39, I think RH beat 3 also sounds staccato. Also, I would add a slur from beat 1 to beat 2 in both measures to make the phrasing (the first note being held) more visually clear.
- I would remove the eighth note on m42 LH beat 1.5 for playability's sake.
- The Db's in m42/45 LH should be written as C#'s.
- I would suggest removing the lowest notes of the three chords indicated here for playability's sake. The extra note makes it cumbersome to play, and not much is really lost since the note is already doubled an octave up:
- m45 RH beat 3.5 sounds like a held quarter note rather than an eighth note.
- I would suggest removing the courtesy Fn's in m47-48. It's already pretty obvious that they're Fn's since F# comes right after.
- The last system looks kind of stretched with only two measures. I would either make the last two systems three measures each, or shorten the last system so it doesn't take up the full width of the page.
- m50 RH beat 3 should be written as Ab instead of G#.
- m50 LH beat 4 should have Gn instead of G#.
- Do the music re-spacing again once you've done implemented the changes just to make sure everything's spaced properly.