[N64] Yoshi's Story - "On the Beach" by Bloop

Started by Zeta, October 23, 2019, 04:30:59 AM

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Submission Information:

Series: Super Mario
Game: Yoshi's Story
Console: Nintendo 64
Title: On the Beach
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Bloop

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Latios212

This is nice!
- Would suggest making the left margin a bit larger to accommodate the staff braces
- m. 10/12/18/similar: I'm hearing beat 2 of the LH restrike the E-B dyad instead of playing C? Is this a stylistic choice? (If so, fine by me)
- m. 23-24/27-28: I'd suggest keeping the top layer explicitly written. The way the middle layer has its rests written and notes flipped is a bit odd. Also make sure your LH notes and articulations are flipped correctly.
- m. 30: would suggest substituting D for B in these chords since B is already in the RH melody
- m. 39/41: those last two eighth notes sound like E instead of A
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Bloop

Fixed!

Quote from: Latios212 on November 02, 2019, 03:22:27 PM- m. 10/12/18/similar: I'm hearing beat 2 of the LH restrike the E-B dyad instead of playing C? Is this a stylistic choice? (If so, fine by me)
Yeah, I think the restriked dyad wouldn't get the point across as much, as it's probably intended as a dead note anyway.

Latios212

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Static

Looks great! The only thing I would change is to make the system spacing on page 3 match page 2. Right now it's a little bit off.

Latios212

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Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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Static

Great! I suppose that means I should do this now.

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