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Good catch on all of those, removed the notes in m3 and m8 and added a tenuto to beat 1 in m7 to make it more obviously distinct. Thanks for checking!

WHAT

LMAO it took me way too long to realize this as well, I think MSF might have pointed it out to me? Either that or I read it in a YouTube comment somewhere.

Submitting some fixes for a very beloved sheet, World 3 from SMG2:

-Composer should be Mahito Yokota
-Tempo should be 110
-m8 RH beat 2: F# should be an Fn
-m8 RH beat 4: missing an A
-m10 RH beat 4: missing an E
-m10 RH beat 4.5: C# should be a Cn
-m11 RH beat 4: missing an E
-m12 RH beat 1: missing a C#
-m13 RH beat 4: I don't think the C# is restruck here
-m16 LH beat 1: missing a Gn, and I don't hear the E. I also think the top three notes would make more sense as a rolled chord in the RH.
-m17 could use a ritardando

The song doesn't actually repeat back to m4, it should repeat back to m5 and there should be an extra measure at the end that looks something like this:

- I would suggest removing the D from the second chord in m. 35; it clashes with the Eb in the left hand a lot especially since there's pedal
- Not sure if I'm imagining it, but a D on top of the second chord in m. 36?
- m. 37 first chord - I think I hear Bb instead of C?

- I mean that clash is there in the original too I honestly don't mind how it sounds on piano, plus you can pretty easily just play that note more quietly when performing. I'll consider removing it if the next updater also takes issue with it.
- Don't think I hear this.
- Ah you're right, good catch although I like it better with the C...

- Dynamics in m. 1/9/33) are all a bit displaced a bit far to the right
- 8va (which would also be an 8va, if you want) could be poked left a bit in m. 24 (both the start and end of it)
- m. 17 is a bit cramped on top, could space the systems out a bit more and sacrifice a little space somewhere else to make up for it

- Classic NotePad... fixed.
- Not exactly sure what you meant by the parenthesized bit but I've shortened the 8va.
- Yeah I'm not really sure what to do about this, I could put an 8va under the whole LH here but I don't like how that looks later on in the sheet and I'd prefer to keep it consistent. If you have any suggestions I'd appreciate them.

Forgot to mention before but I'd also appreciate if you could replace the pedal markings in m33-40 in with ones that actually work (preferably in the [Ped *] style). Thanks for taking a look!

A bit unsure about the spelling in m14, suggestions appreciated.

Very sneaky Vegetable Valley remix. Also this song's internal file name is just "Normal" which I find funny for some reason.

Ah I like this for m. 9-20, but not past that. It gets too high for my preference if I raise 17-20 up an octave. Plus this way, the transitions into and out of that section also work very smoothly. I adjusted the harmony a little bit where I've turned the melody into octaves, and also added parentheses to the high Ab in m. 11 since that octave jump can be a bit annoying and I think that top note can be omitted without much of a loss sound-wise.

Hm, to me 17-20 are the climax of the piece so it makes sense to keep the octaves there, suddenly taking them out feels like a drop in energy vs in the original where it sounds like it's increasing in energy. The transitions in the original are kind of abrupt as well, so as much as I like smoothness it feels less accurate to me this way. That's just my two cents though, feel free to keep it as is if you prefer! I'd be interested to hear others' opinions on this.

Let me know if you'd prefer more harmony in m. 12 and maybe 10 for that matter?)

Ah yeah, I think adding Cs to both beats in m10 and Bbs to both beats in m12 would be nice.

Thirds sound good. Not sure if the D's would fit in too nicely here, I think it's fine without?

Yeah it's probably fine without the Ds. Also I think the bottom note on beat 2 is actually an F rather than a G.

I included it in the bottom of the current chords, sounds good?

To me raising those horn chords an octave and inverting them kind of falsely implies that they're part of the melody, whereas I hear them as more of a background texture in the original. I think keeping them down in the original octave and inversion would help avoid that, although what you have is fine if you don't want to do that.

For beat 2, to confirm, did you mean there's a Bn under the D, that would clash with the bass Bb?

Yep, it's the b9 of the Bb7(b9) chord. I agree with raising the LH here as well, I actually meant to suggest that as a second option but I forgot lol.

Everything else looks great!

In m44-47, I'm pretty sure the middle RH notes are all actually tritones instead of 4ths/5ths. That's all I've got I think!

I barely remember this piece lol

-The melody in the original is in octaves from m9 beat 1 to m20 beat 1. I think adding that in here could help differentiate the latter two sections from the first one texturally, as well as allow for more harmony. Thoughts on raising the whole RH by an octave and adding a lower octave doubling the melody for those measures?
-I think adding a crescendo in m8 to a mf in m9 would be appropriate here.
-m3 + m11 RH beat 2: Pretty sure I hear a D in these spots; I'd personally prioritize it over the Cs here since it's the 3rd and it's being resolved to from a sus4.
-m4 + m12: I hear an Eb in the RH on beat 1 and a Bb in the LH on beat 2, you could move the D on beat 2 to the RH if you want to keep a consistent number of voices per hand.
-m7 RH beats 2-2.6 sound like they're harmonized in 3rds like in m5. Also there are Ds on both beat 1 and 2, not sure if you left them out intentionally but figured I'd mention it.
-m15 RH beat 2: the melody note sounds to me like a D instead of a Bb.
-m16 RH: There's an upper voice on beats 1.6 and 2 that goes F -> Eb.
-m20 RH beat 2.3: bottom note should be a Db.
-m23 RH: There's a lower voice that goes Cn -> Bn here. There's also an Ab on beat 1, you could put it in voice 1 under the top Bb.

I meant to say something when you first submitted it, but incredible work on this you two

My only comment is about the phrasing of the melody, in m8 + m10 + m12 I'm not hearing any of the downbeats as staccato, and this applies to all other repeats of this phrase later in the sheet as well (excluding m39-46 and m92-97)

Everything looks great, thanks for the edits 

Maybe unrelated to what Bloop intended, but I was gonna comment m. 15 feels like it should be Cb on beat 3.5 similar to m11.

I was pretty unsure about this spot tbh, listening back I think you're right. I don't hear the staccato anymore either.

Also, the crescendo in m. 24 should end before the barline, not on it.

Ah that would be Notepad's fault, didn't catch that.

Unfortunately since you and Bloop saved this with full Finale, all the staccatos are messed up in Notepad, so if you could do both of those edits I'd appreciate it (I don't want to save it as-is).

This is really great, nice work! (You should submit sheets more often...)

Thanks! I've got a bunch in the works, I've just been meaning to get full Finale so that I can actually get them somewhat how I want them looking before submissions. Hopefully soon...

-m11 and 15: I think I just hear a Cb on beat 3 instead of Gb.

I assume you meant in the LH, in which case I'm still hearing the Gb.

For the 8va, I definitely went back and forth on whether or not to include it, especially for m9-10/m13-14 since the texture sounds a bit off there with the hands so far apart. I also considered raising the LH an octave for just those measures, since I prefer the lower bass sound in the rest of the sheet, but I'm not sure I like how that sounds either. I think for now I'll just edit the performance direction to make it optional to play an octave below written.

And yeah, if you could grab those ties and hide the 8va I'd appreciate it. Thanks for the feedback!

[Yoshi's Woolly World: Wonderful World of Wool 6]

Yoshi's Woolly World: Wonderful World of Wool 6

Outer Rings 2??
(Yes, this is a lava level theme)

• No officially confirmed composer for this one, but the game's internal music filenames point towards Toru Minegishi being the composer. If you don't feel like going off of those, then you should credit all 3 composers: Mahito Yokota, Toru Minegishi & Yasuaki Iwata.
• Hearing m1/2 LH a little differently:
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  I changed the drum fills (tremolo in m1 and ending 16ths in m2) to Fs since that's the previous bass note.
  

  -m1-2: I hear some other notes in beat 2 and 3.5 in the L.H., but it's a bit hard to make out. I think it's first F, then D in m1.

  I hear these, but since the bass is also hitting an F on beat 2, I think putting the D on beat 3.5 into the RH might make more sense here to avoid a random extra LH note (hence my omission in the image). Feel free to keep it in the LH if you want though.
• The main repeating LH pattern in m3-m20 sounds a lot more staccato to me in the original, specifically all of the 5th dyads.
• I think when Xiao said the melody could use more articulation (correct me if I'm wrong Xiao), they were talking more about notes that should be staccato, as opposed to adding accent marks. Personally, I don't really hear the melody of the original having any especially strong accents besides m1-2 and m24, and all the other places you've added them are already naturally stressed by the meter, so I think you'd probably be fine leaving them out.