Good catch on all of those, removed the notes in m3 and m8 and added a tenuto to beat 1 in m7 to make it more obviously distinct. Thanks for checking!
Spotted an error on the main site? Let us know!
This section allows you to view all posts made by this member. Note that you can only see posts made in areas you currently have access to.
Show posts MenuQuote from: LeviR.star on June 03, 2024, 08:48:02 PMWHATLMAO it took me way too long to realize this as well, I think MSF might have pointed it out to me? Either that or I read it in a YouTube comment somewhere.
Quote from: Latios212 on June 02, 2024, 07:32:49 PM- I would suggest removing the D from the second chord in m. 35; it clashes with the Eb in the left hand a lot especially since there's pedal- I mean that clash is there in the original too I honestly don't mind how it sounds on piano, plus you can pretty easily just play that note more quietly when performing. I'll consider removing it if the next updater also takes issue with it.
- Not sure if I'm imagining it, but a D on top of the second chord in m. 36?
- m. 37 first chord - I think I hear Bb instead of C?
Quote from: Latios212 on June 02, 2024, 07:32:49 PM- Dynamics in m. 1/9/33) are all a bit displaced a bit far to the right- Classic NotePad... fixed.
- 8va (which would also be an 8va, if you want) could be poked left a bit in m. 24 (both the start and end of it)
- m. 17 is a bit cramped on top, could space the systems out a bit more and sacrifice a little space somewhere else to make up for it
Quote from: Latios212 on March 09, 2024, 03:11:06 PMAh I like this for m. 9-20, but not past that. It gets too high for my preference if I raise 17-20 up an octave. Plus this way, the transitions into and out of that section also work very smoothly. I adjusted the harmony a little bit where I've turned the melody into octaves, and also added parentheses to the high Ab in m. 11 since that octave jump can be a bit annoying and I think that top note can be omitted without much of a loss sound-wise.Hm, to me 17-20 are the climax of the piece so it makes sense to keep the octaves there, suddenly taking them out feels like a drop in energy vs in the original where it sounds like it's increasing in energy. The transitions in the original are kind of abrupt as well, so as much as I like smoothness it feels less accurate to me this way. That's just my two cents though, feel free to keep it as is if you prefer! I'd be interested to hear others' opinions on this.
Quote from: Latios212 on March 09, 2024, 03:11:06 PMLet me know if you'd prefer more harmony in m. 12 and maybe 10 for that matter?)Ah yeah, I think adding Cs to both beats in m10 and Bbs to both beats in m12 would be nice.
Quote from: Latios212 on March 09, 2024, 03:11:06 PMThirds sound good. Not sure if the D's would fit in too nicely here, I think it's fine without?Yeah it's probably fine without the Ds. Also I think the bottom note on beat 2 is actually an F rather than a G.
Quote from: Latios212 on March 09, 2024, 03:11:06 PMI included it in the bottom of the current chords, sounds good?To me raising those horn chords an octave and inverting them kind of falsely implies that they're part of the melody, whereas I hear them as more of a background texture in the original. I think keeping them down in the original octave and inversion would help avoid that, although what you have is fine if you don't want to do that.
Quote from: Latios212 on March 09, 2024, 03:11:06 PMFor beat 2, to confirm, did you mean there's a Bn under the D, that would clash with the bass Bb?Yep, it's the b9 of the Bb7(b9) chord. I agree with raising the LH here as well, I actually meant to suggest that as a second option but I forgot lol.
Quote from: Latios212 on August 27, 2023, 07:52:30 AMMaybe unrelated to what Bloop intended, but I was gonna comment m. 15 feels like it should be Cb on beat 3.5 similar to m11.I was pretty unsure about this spot tbh, listening back I think you're right. I don't hear the staccato anymore either.
Quote from: Latios212 on August 27, 2023, 07:52:30 AMAlso, the crescendo in m. 24 should end before the barline, not on it.Ah that would be Notepad's fault, didn't catch that.
Quote from: Latios212 on August 27, 2023, 07:52:30 AMThis is really great, nice work! (You should submit sheets more often...)Thanks! I've got a bunch in the works, I've just been meaning to get full Finale so that I can actually get them somewhat how I want them looking before submissions. Hopefully soon...
Quote from: Bloop on August 25, 2023, 07:51:01 AM-m11 and 15: I think I just hear a Cb on beat 3 instead of Gb.I assume you meant in the LH, in which case I'm still hearing the Gb.
Quote from: Bloop on December 31, 2022, 05:37:54 AM-m1-2: I hear some other notes in beat 2 and 3.5 in the L.H., but it's a bit hard to make out. I think it's first F, then D in m1.I hear these, but since the bass is also hitting an F on beat 2, I think putting the D on beat 3.5 into the RH might make more sense here to avoid a random extra LH note (hence my omission in the image). Feel free to keep it in the LH if you want though.
Page created in 0.038 seconds with 16 queries.