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I getcha, but my personal preference is to leave it as the default beaming most of the time unless something looks really strange (vague, I know). Here, I think it's pretty clear that that figure of rest-eighth-rest-eighth has the eighth notes as offbeats even though they're beamed together. I also think it would be odd if I broke them in some places but not others in this sheet, so I'd prefer to leave it.

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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 20, 2019, 10:25:52 PM »
Maelstrom - Dracula's Castle
- Looks pretty good. I'd suggest flipping the ties in the first chord down to match the rest of the section.
- Some dynamic changes (i.e. cresc.) in the last system maybe?

Yug_Guy - Super Castlevania IV - Simon Belmont's Theme
- I would try to avoid having that large 16th note jump in m13 RH. The ones in m17-25 LH work well because the intervals are only 5ths, but this one is a 7th. I'd just remove the lower note.
- Does it not just ascend A-Bb-C in octaves?
- m. 17+: Definitely not all these notes are staccato. I'd suggest removing staccatos on your eighth notes in the RH of this part

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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 20, 2019, 05:26:44 AM »
Levi - Catching Ghosts 3
Levi - King Dedede
Accepted!

Static - Murasaki Forest
Approved!

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Submissions / Re: [Wii] Wario Land: Shake It! - "Ropey Jungle" by Static
« on: October 20, 2019, 01:15:16 AM »
I am guilty of writing a D.S. to m1 when there's a pickup myself, but I recently learned that this isn't standard. D.C. alone indicates m1, and the pickup is not included unless specified otherwise.
Huh, I didn't know that. I suppose it's pretty clearly implied here, so looks good.

I approve! (By the way, that chord, <something>9sus4 is my favorite chord)

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Submissions / Re: [WiiU] Super Mario 3D World - "Sprixie Kingdom" by amc
« on: October 20, 2019, 12:03:03 AM »
All key changes need double barlines where they occur.
I think this is just the new version of Finale being weird... the PDF has them

Besides the other stuff Static said, a last few things to add:
- I think the chords in m. 6 should be inverted up (Ab on top instead of bottom).
- Move the slur up slightly in m. 22 so it doesn't collide with the 3.
- The descending triads in m. 27-28 are very muddy and also a bit difficult to play at that speed. I'd suggest removing the middle note of each, since that pitch is octave doubled by the right hand anyway so you wouldn't be losing anything harmonically.
- m. 38, 47, 53 have beat 1 in the LH flipped.
- Unlike m. 36, the bass moves down a whole step in m. 43 beat 4 from D to C
- I'd recommend moving the top layer rests up in m. 48 to separate them from the lower layer more. Similarly, you can put the lower layer rests back on the staff at normal height since the to player is entirely above the staff.
- Bass in m. 49 sounds like it descends F-Fb-Eb-Db instead of F-F-Bb-Bb
- Flip tie in m. 50 down away from the top layer

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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 19, 2019, 10:41:44 PM »
Zeila - Battle (Team Skull)
- Wow, this works a lot better for piano than I thought it would
- I'm hearing m. 39 and 47 beat 4 as a chromatic approach to the next measure - G#-D# for m. 39 and En-Bn for 47.
- Not really sure I follow the melody in m. 52-55? I'm hearing something like parallel fifths below what you have written

Yug Guy - Intermission from DOOM [E2M3]
- Can we emulate some of those percussive rhythms in the interlude in m. 27+ and 68+? Even if it's just varying up the rhythm of the low E's. The entire vibe of the section is lost currently.
- Other than that, everything looks well in order.

Trasdegi - Portentousness
- I don't think rolled chords are the best way to write the first half. Besides not meshing with the other layer well, it leaves the execution unclear as the chord is far too big for the right hand to roll naturally. Each of the ascending notes is distinctly marked so this would be better written as an ascending run of distinct notes.

Static - Murasaki Forest
- Is this not in 16th swing? I'm not that great at telling...
- Some of these chords sound to me like they maybe should be inverted up, but I'm not 100% sure. If you wouldn't mind double checking what you have for m. 7-8, 11-12, 16, 18, 20. Conversely, 30 sounds like it could be inverted down.
- Would suggest moving the rests up in m. 17.

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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 19, 2019, 09:07:28 PM »
Code_Name_Geek - Spirit's Eve Festival
- Wow, this is a really weird pulse...
- This looks great! The harmonies are all correct; this piece only uses 2 chords (A minor and E major).
- Aha but the second chord in m. 7 is an E7; it should have D instead of E in the right hand.
- Switch layers in m. 30/34 so that the tie correctly cancels out the G# accidental.
- I think the last chord should be inverted down once.

Static- Scorching Back
- Looks good, approved

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*poke*

Messaged Libera a little while back and he suggested something more like this for 21-22:

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This looks terrific, great work guys!

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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 19, 2019, 08:14:34 PM »
Levi - Dragonlord
What a strange piece... but sheet looks good!

Levi - Catching Ghosts 3
- Last bass note of m. 4 should be Ab

Levi - Ghost Approaching
- nice

Levi - King Dedede
- Wow this is a cool piece, not what I expected at all with that title. Tritones, chromatic lines, whole tone scales...
- m. 10's D#s should be written as Eb's to match the bass. The diminished third between Eb and C# is a necessary evil if you want to parallel m. 8 (I think that's the most straightforward way to write these measures anyway).

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Submissions / Re: [Wii] Wario Land: Shake It! - "Ropey Jungle" by Static
« on: October 19, 2019, 07:19:39 PM »
hey this sounds like something from kirby's -
*looks at youtube account*
- ah yes

Cool song and cool sheet, sorry for the wait. Only thing I have to say is that the F#sus chord at the end of m. 4 (and 9) sounds rather empty without the seventh and ninth (E/G#) that seem to be repeated (or at least emphasized) as opposed to just lingering from the previous chord. I'd suggest including them by writing the right hand as G#-B-C#-E or something like that.

Oh, and the repeat should specify that it's going back to m. 1, not the beginning including the pickup.

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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 18, 2019, 03:30:34 AM »
Daijoubu!
The rhythm in b3-4 of m21-28 isn't as complex as the original sounds. Is there intention behind this? Not against the simplification, but you wrote out all the other pattern so I'm just curious.
I'll approve otherwise.
Yeah, I wasn't too sure about what to do with that part. Mostly I think it's the strike on beat 3.25 that's missing, but I wanted to make sure the bass notes were clear and not demand a jump up so quickly. Hopefully it doesn't sound too empty, let me know if you think otherwise.

Pokegear Radio: Unown
accepted
but what is unown really
yes

Thanks for checking!

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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 17, 2019, 01:39:43 AM »
Last one from me :P

Pokémon Yellow Version - Jessie & James Appear


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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 16, 2019, 04:10:48 AM »
AwesomeYears - Deadly Premonition - The Woods and the Goddess
- Missing dynamics. They could be especially useful in this particular piece.
- To keep the beaming and rhythms consistent, I would write m5 LH (and any measure like it) like m44 LH. This also applies to places like m15.
- m30: Tie should be flipped up so it isn't too close to the 2nd layer in m31 (same applies to m86-87).
- m72: Half rest in layer 2 should be 2 quarter rests.
- m73, 82, 84: The pedal markings in these measures are touching the stems of the LH notes.
- Is there a reason why there are no pedal markings in the Coda?
- You should separate your Coda section on a new indented line.
- Some of the arpeggio markings are too close to notes/barlines.
- The final fermata is clashing with the note. LH should have a fermata too.
- The copyright info is too small and doesn't need to be on every page.
- Since it looks like you use NotePad, I made most of these changes for you here, plus some additional formatting adjustments. Any musical changes, like dynamics, pedaling, etc. I'm leaving to you.
Hey AwesomeYears, I was looking this over recently (really cool song btw, glad you introduced me to it!) and I think this would be much better with the note durations halved, and using a 6/8 time signature (with the occasional 3/8 bar). Doing so would:
- make the tempo a more reasonable pace for a song like this
- more clearly demonstrate where the phrases are, and resultantly where to pedal
- highlight the irregularities in the song's structure (the 3/8 bars)

It's a pretty big overhaul but I think it would make the sheet much nicer to read. Here's what it would look like:


Also, you don't need a new pedal marking for every single measure. It's easy enough to imply the pedaling that you want especially with the above change. But you do need dynamics!

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Submission Center / Re: Halloween 2k19 Update
« on: October 15, 2019, 12:59:28 AM »
I also updated Bad End, here are the links for convenience once again:
Bad End
Cool. Looks awesome, I just adjusted the ties and spacing between staves a bit to clean up the chords.

Okay, then it's done!
Awesome.

Levi - A Requiem
Levi - Stage 2
Accepted

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