Hey, this is a great start! Solid arrangement.
Just looking right now, one of the things you can improve on is articulation. How are the melody notes played? Take a look and see, for instance, where staccatos would be in order - like the eighth notes in the melody of m. 2. (You also need dynamics - just an opening one would be fine here.)
Aside from that, there are some inaccuracies here and there I'm seeing (just listing some) -
- The harmonies aren't all A for the first bunch of dyads. The melody also does a triplet on beat 3.5 in the first measure.
- Is the C-D-E triad intentional in m. 2 and other places? It doesn't look like the D really belongs or adds anything.
- Measure 12, the A-C dyad on m. 12 beat 2.5 should be G-C.
- Measure 14, the first triplet should be G#-A-B.
Take another pass through it and check that you have everything right.
Additionally, it looks like there are a few odd things related to spacing probably due to Finale Notepad. Once you've gone over it for the above stuff, I'd be happy to help you improve the layout a little bit. Any questions, feel free to ask!
