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Really sorry for the wait. I really need a clear head to be able to go through this one... haha. I'll see how far I get right now.

- I think the chords in m. 19 don't have the B on top
- m. 21 - I hear the upper piano voice going A# > F# - maybe omit the A# on beat 3? (Or maybe I'm getting distracted by the low voice)
- The f shouldn't be on the chord in m. 36, it's suddenly quieter there. Maybe the f at the end of 35 and a mp or something at the beginning of 36?
- I would suggest taking the F# out of the dyad in m. 38 in favor of keeping the violin melody on beat 3.5 instead
- Gn should be F# in m. 48 (3rd above D# root)

That covers the first two pages, up until just over a minute in. Looking solid so far, I appreciate the attention to detail :)

Projects / Re: Latios212's Colo(u)rs Project Sheets
« on: September 16, 2021, 02:38:53 AM »
Yep, all of those sound right, though I'm not 100% sure about the F# in secondo LH m. 24 beat 3. I've changed that anyway.

(Also for the chord in m. 12, I added a natural on the lower G since the upper one is now flat)

Thanks again!

Projects / Re: Cashwarrior1's Color Sheets
« on: September 16, 2021, 12:46:52 AM »
White Forest

Yeah I had considered doing that when I first arranged but I think it would sound better with a simple score.
Sounds goooood, it's also really easy to play this way haha

Well it was because the bass holds a quarter note while the strings still did staccato. Though if it's better for it all to be held, I can change that.
Alright, that's fine then, I definitely hear it!

One last thing I wonder if it may just be best to write in the harmony in the second chord in m. 10/18 anyway for consistency - the chords move a bit in the original but as you have it right now it just looks like an omitted note. Up to you

Having said that last comment I will approve~

Submission Archive / Re: [NES] Journey to Silius - "Stage 1 & 5" by Atcero
« on: September 13, 2021, 11:40:07 PM »
Cool B) approved by me!

Nice :)

Should the last two bars (i.e. the 7/8 ones) also be changed or are they good as is time sig-wise?
Yeah hm this is a bit strange. I think something like this would make sense to read:

Other than that:
- See how it looks after you mess with the last measure, but I would recommend four three-measure systems (with the last one maybe having two) since the spacing is a bit uneven now - the last system is cramped - and there's more vertical space on the page you can use
- After messing with the distribution, check the lower/upper staff distance for each system - the space is rather large in the last system right now
- Write the Cn in m. 2 as part of the upper voice
- Use 4/4 instead of C at the beginning to match m. 3
- Move the tempo marking left a bit in m. 2 to account for the offset introduced by the natural on the C
- Flip the tie between m. 3-4 LH down to point away from the upper layer in m. 4

Projects / Re: mastersuperfan's Color Sheets
« on: September 13, 2021, 12:46:27 AM »
The Silver Peaks of Froenborg

- m. 23 sounds pretty... suddenly bassy and imposing with that tritone in the bass. I don't think the low E is actually there in the original? I think the diminished sound is coming from the E in the voice omitted in layer 2 on beat 1.
All changes made, except I still hear the piano strike a prominent low E on m23 beat 1. I think the tritone sounds fine as long as the pianist doesn't blast it.
Hmm, not super convinced about this still. I'll approve and see if someone else has any input on that :P

Projects / Re: Latios212's Colo(u)rs Project Sheets
« on: September 12, 2021, 09:02:32 PM »
Lavender Mist
All good suggestions and adjusted! I especially like the suggestion for including the A->Ab voice in those measures, that actually fits really nicely. For the last few bars, I went with staccatos but not accents as I don't think these notes are that heavily accented (or should be on piano).

For the slurs, I tend to use them sparingly unless I feel like I need to. The staccatos already sort of outline where to end phrases at least in m. 18-19. That said, I think in these couple of systems they do help highlight how m. 21-24 is played differently than 17-20 so I've added them in! (I haven't added them anywhere else though.)

Pewter City
-m. 12 and 28, Pri. R.H.: wow octatonic scale getting used. You could renotate the first four accidentals in m. 12 as A# B# C# D# and the first two in m. 28 as D# and E#, if you like having a stepwise motion in notenames, but either way works.
Haha yeah I wasn't too sure how to spell these! I do think they look kinda funny either way. That said, I tried to contextualize it with what the lower parts were doing - in m. 12 having Bb/Db above an Eb bass and in m. Eb/F# above a D bass. (That said, looking at it again, I'm not sure if writing F# on top of the chord in m. 12 is correct...?)

Got the other two things! Thanks for checking!

A couple small things:
- Top layer, m. 10 second note should be Dn instead of Cn
- I think the cresc. in m. 12 should end before the barline, without crossing it

Before I get into the other details (system spacing, slurs, tempo marking position, etc.) - a few thoughts about the intro. While what you have is correct timing-wise (except for m. 7, I think), it seems a bit odd that the fluctuating BPM for the intro is roughly twice that of the 12/8 section. This feels kind of off to me since the intro feels more laid-back and free-form than the rest which proceeds at a pretty steady tempo in the 12/8 rhythm.

Compare with this:

The pulse would not have a drastic change to the second section, and you'd also have a better picture of where the phrases begin and end (RH from the Fx to the Cn, and from the Dn to the B). Thoughts?

Submission Archive / Re: [NES] Journey to Silius - "Stage 1 & 5" by Atcero
« on: September 12, 2021, 08:05:05 PM »
this is a bop for sure

So I fixed the tempo and you were right about M23 grace note.

I rechecked the NSF file and it is the echo, but it does sound repeated at the same time so thats kinda a toss up and ill defer to a second opinion just in case. Thank ya so much!
I don't hear any grace notes in m. 23. However, I do think the G's in the RH in m. 17-22 all have F# grace notes preceding them, although it does seem rather subtle in some places...

m40 the second RH note sounds to me like it's an F like the previous note.  I also think there's a G below the Bb on beat 3.5 in that measure as well, but given how echoey it is I'll leave that up to your and the updaters' judgement (cop out  :P :-X)
I think just the single voice will do just fine here, similar to the previous measures.

A few other things, this looks great overall:
- The last bass note of m. 11/15/27/31/35/39 should be F instead of G
- I don't think I hear the melody re-strike a C on beat1.5 of m. 18/20/22 - it sounds like the previously struck C is just held and a new melody note is played on beat 2?
- In other places you have a dotted quarter on beat 3.5, so would suggest the same in m. 24 RH to match
- I'd suggest slurring each of your grace notes to the melody note that follows each

2021 Week 37

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Site News / Updater update
« on: September 09, 2021, 05:16:23 PM »
Hello everyone! Today I have some updates to share regarding our updating staff.

First, Maelstrom will switch over to being a Ghost Updater. Maelstrom has been on the staff as an Updater for over 5 years, and we owe him a lot for the countless sheets he’s reviewed, as well as help replacing many old sheets on the site. Please wish him a wonderful time in ghost land grad school! (He’s still very much alive, for now.)

Now, we’re having a new Updater join the team for the first time in a while! Bloop is a longtime community member with a recent increase in activity and desire to help out. Please give Bloop a warm welcome aboard the staff.

Times change, life goes on, and new sheets are added to NinSheetMusic. As always, look forward to more soon :)

- Game title should be "Plants vs. Zombies" - we can fix that later, don't resubmit the sheet
Got that updated

Projects / Re: Static's Colers Project Sheets
« on: September 08, 2021, 05:19:14 AM »
Looks gooood

Projects / Re: mastersuperfan's Color Sheets
« on: September 08, 2021, 02:00:53 AM »
The Silver Peaks of Froenborg

This is a really nice piece... I very much like this style. It's a delight to play, learning other sheets like this one really made me appreciate this kind of writing ;D Thanks for preventing this sheet from having gigantic rolled chords.

- Beat 3 of m. 7 should be a low G (restrikes the bass, like the previous couple measures)
- Beat 3.25 of m. 8 sounds like an A instead of a B in the LH. You could also omit the A from the chord immediately following it
- On the flip side, last LH note in m. 9 sounds like B instead of A :P
- Last note of m. 12 LH sounds like F# instead of A
- m. 23 sounds pretty... suddenly bassy and imposing with that tritone in the bass. I don't think the low E is actually there in the original? I think the diminished sound is coming from the E in the voice omitted in layer 2 on beat 1.
- Flip the tie downwards in m. 25 away from the upper layer. Also the right end of the dotted line could be moved down a bit so as to not end directly on the staff line?

Projects / Re: Cashwarrior1's Color Sheets
« on: September 08, 2021, 01:32:47 AM »
White Forest

First of all, thank you for doing this one :)

Main thing I want to ask is, have you experimented with potentially including some notes/rhythms from the (I think it's a marimba)? Some places sound a bit empty when the melody is playing the same rhythm as the left hand chords, like in the beginning. I don't think that voice necessarily meshes very well but it would help with the motion if you wrote in notes for (for example) beats 1.5-2 in the first measure. If this ends up getting too cluttery or sounds bad that's fine, but I think it's something to think about.

Regarding your slur markings, I personally don't find slur/phrase markings that extend over entire systems to be super helpful. I think I'd only tend to use them here when showing a lead-in to the next phrase like at the end of m. 20/24. For those parts, another way to differentiate the phrases would be to break the beam in m. 20 and make beat 3 an eighth rest in m. 24. What you have right now though is fine, though, so your choice.

Also, you might want to reconsider if you want the slurs over staccatos or if it'd be clearer to just leave those phrases as staccato.

Other stuff at a first glance:
- Shota Kageyama
- You don't need a forward repeat bar at the beginning
- Slur your grace notes? :P
- When you have two eighth rests on beat 3-3.5, it should be a quarter rest. This goes for all the measures
- You might want to put the "etc." in m. 4 below the LH, or use a simile instead in m. 5, since right now it's a bit unclear what it's referring to. (Presumably the articulations in the LH chords)
- I was going to comment on the mordent in m. 6... but it actually does alternate B-C#-B instead of using the mixolydian Cn like the rest of the section! Interesting.
- Any reason why m. 18 LH is in two layers? Seems like it might just be simpler to keep it in one like everywhere else

(Note to self: only checked the melody so far, didn't look at the chords yet)

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