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m5-8 RH beat 1 has an E. Might be cool to include that minor 9th in there.

I think what you're hearing there is the voice I wrote in m. 4 which continues throughout the section. I don't think it meshes particularly well with the part that comes in at m. 5 though (both in terms of intervals it creates like the minor second, and rhythmically), so I left it out.

maybe use 4/8 instead of 1/4? The piece is so slow that I feel the tempo in 8ths more than in (dotted) quarters.

2/8? Yup that definitely makes more sense.

m36-37 and 60-61 LH sounds like it should have Es instead of Ds, or at least E is a pretty prominent note in the accompaniment (C9/G chord).

Ah yeah it doesn't just resolve to Gm there. Updated the accompaniment part with what the original is doing an octave up, which actually matches the style of the rest of the accompaniment pretty well

For m30-35 and 38-43 LH, you have a lot of room in between the current LH part and the RH melody to include some more mid-range tones (with a similar accompaniment pattern to the previous sections). It sounds fine as is though if you'd rather keep it.

I think I'd like to keep it. Leaving it as just two lines gives it contrast to the last section where I've added more to both parts, and the left hand pattern is already naturally a bit more forceful than the previous sections as it's lower.

Quote from: Zeila on May 31, 2021, 11:25:21 PM

m60-61 RH: The 2nd layer strings move with the melody, it's not just one held note.

Ooh yeah, I was distracted by the sustained G. I've written in the harmonies that I think are there planing upwards with the voice I originally wrote in.

Files updated! Thanks for checking!

Submissions / Re: [MUL] Shovel Knight: Plague of Shadows - "Le Bouquet Magique" by Zeila

« on: June 10, 2021, 04:07:56 AM »

Wow. This is a really cool piece. It sounds like it could be something out of Your Lie in April...

m152 does "poco a poco a tempo" make sense, or would there be a better way to describe a gradual return to tempo after a molto ritardando (like if writing that in English would be better)?

I don't know much Italian past a few musical directions, but I don't think this really makes sense... right? "little by little" "in time"? The "little by little" should probably apply to an accel./rit. because an instruction to play at tempo is static. Here I'd suggest just using an accel. instead and indicating which measure you want to put the "a tempo" (if you even want an "a tempo" at all since it's really loose and slows down a few measures later anyway).

Submissions / Re: [GCN] Pokémon Colosseum - "Miror B. Battle" (Replacement) by Kricketune54

« on: June 10, 2021, 03:55:35 AM »

Great arrangement! It keeps the accompaniment simple while maintain the lively vibe of the original.

Quote from: Kricketune54 on May 29, 2021, 10:43:47 PM

-The duet line between trumpet and sax that starts at m33 and goes until end of m48 has some simplifications where I left out the chord notes in eight note runs except in the very first notes of these runs.

I like this because parallel thirds drive me crazy

- Raise the tempo marking a bit
- I'd suggest moving the f at the beginning to the left of the notes or allocating more space between LH/RH staves, as it's a bit squished between the staccatos right now
- Getting this for m. 7 RH:

- Be consistent with your beam breaking - namely break beams over rests in m. 16/18
- Maky m. 13 look like m. 5 (eighth instead of quarter on beat 3.5)
- Use Fb instead of En in the LH of m. 21/23/49/51
- Speaking of those parts, I'd consider redistributing the notes between hands a little bit because those consecutive 4-note chords can be a bit tough to play quickly in the right hand. It's doable without moving your hand position (have your fingers on Ab Cb Db Fb Ab) but it's a bit hard to pound them out quickly and powerfully. This messes with the voicing a bit visually but I think it would be easier to throw the low Ab on beat 3 to the LH.
- Also for these parts, break the beam in the LH between beats 3-4 like in the RH.
- Totally fine to (and preferred, even) use a dotted half when it falls on beat 2 - m. 33/37 here

And what a great performance note at the end. I think I would suggest altering the wording ever so slightly, like:

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Performance Note:
At the ends of measures 2, 4, 12, and beginnings of measures 17, 19, 24, 32, 41, 43, and 52 -
feel free to enthusiastically shout in Spanglish, loudly roll R's or laugh in a jovial fashion

edit: also fixed the submission title

Submissions / Re: [GCN] Pokémon Colosseum - "Main Menu" (Replacement) by Kricketune54

« on: June 10, 2021, 03:34:38 AM »

Quote from: Kricketune54 on June 01, 2021, 02:34:35 AM

I think I saw something happening here when I did this to the bottom layer, but I wasn't too sure what this was doing.

If you create second intervals between the two layers, one of the notes will get automatically moved, but it won't get moved back if you delete the notes in the other layer. I see it on a bunch of sheets where someone first writes out a bunch of stuff and then reduces it (or stuff gets shifted forwards or backwards in the measure while editing), so watch out for that whenever you remove notes.

Anyway, yeah, looking good! Some follow-up comments before I think I'm mostly done with it:
- The first couple of beats (including the chords and rests) in m. 10 and 11 are now misaligned between the different layers somehow, do the same thing for removing manual adjustments. Also m. 6 RH beat 4.25.
- Be consistent with your usage of 16th-staccato 8th-16th vs. 16th-16th-16th rest-16th rhythms in places like beat 4 RH of m. 6/8/10/12. I would recommend the latter so you don't end up with an awkward-looking 16th-8th-16th rest rhythm in m. 8.
- If we're pretty consistently separating rests between layers, do so in m. 6 as well.
- Some rests can go on normal height on the staff, like the lower layer ones in m. 5, 7, 8.
- By contrast, some do need to be moved away a bit. The last eighth rest in m. 9 is too close to the upper layer. You also should raise the upper rests in m. 10 a bit since that eighth rest looks like it precedes the 16th note chord on beat 3.25.
- Give the gap between LH/RH staff more space in m. 10.

Sorry for all the small nitpicks haha. All for cleaning it up

Submission Archive / Re: [NES] Dragon Quest III: The Seeds of Salvation - "Rondo" by LeviR.star

« on: June 10, 2021, 01:05:34 AM »

Quote from: LeviR.star on June 07, 2021, 03:55:48 AM

From what I've seen, Smash Ultimate (which I think is a suitable reference,) uses the names from the Symphonic Suites, and Dragon Quest III, which has two different suites of its own, uses the title "Rondo" for both. Besides, "Rondo" is the most common title I've come across, so that's good enough for me.

Makes sense. Sheet looks great!

Submission Archive / Re: [GBC] The Legend of Zelda: Oracle of Ages &ampamp The Legend of Zelda: Oracle of Seasons - "quotquotL

« on: June 10, 2021, 01:01:49 AM »

Thanks. Making a final few edits:
- Fixing a typo in the composer name
- Adding a double barline at the section change (m. 9)
- Adjusting system spacing to allow more room for the rehearsal marking in m. 9 and f below m. 13
and accepting!

Submissions / Re: [Wii] Super Mario Galaxy 2 - "Bowser Jr.'s Fiery Flotilla" (Replacement) by Latios212

« on: June 10, 2021, 12:41:03 AM »

Thank you Zeila and Static for your feedback!

m7/11 quarter note sounds like an eighth + eighth rest

I kinda agree with the quarter notes in m7 and 11, but a tenuto 8th would work also. It definitely sounds longer than the staccato 8ths.

Changed them to tenuto 8ths

m16/18 you could put E's and Bb's here to imitate the snare hits since it sounds a little empty

Sounds good; I also added hits on m. 15/17 beat 1 to fill in space that would sound comparatively awkward without the extra hits

m19-26 it sounds like it crescendos throughout the buildup, and I think it would be nice to incorporate that into your sheet too (e.g. you could start m19 at mf and do a four-measure crescendo starting from m23 to f on m27, or you could keep m19 at mp and do a crescendo up to m23 as well)

Yup, makes sense. I changed m. 15 to p and 19 to mp, 23 to mf, with cresc. text in m. 19 and 23 (didn't want the hairpins stretched across the entire system)

m30 LH beat 4 maybe you could change this to G to reflect the timpani hit

Do you mean beat 4.5? I hear a G pickup to the C in the next measure so I wrote it on beat 4.5.

last measure RH beat 3 it sounds like the high strings go up to F# at the end, so you could consider centering the octave around F# instead of B

I've always heard these as the same chord, maybe just with different parts emphasized - I'd like to keep it as is.

In addition to the above:
m1 RH beat 1 should be G# on the bottom instead of B.
m1 RH beat 4 should have an A in the chord (though in the original it's an octave higher in the flute).
Is there a reason why m8/12/14 RH beats 3-4 aren't beamed? It's all part of the same voice there.
m14 RH beat 4 should be B instead of C.
m32 RH beat 1.5 should be staccato.

Got these

m1 RH beat 4 should have an A in the chord (though in the original it's an octave higher in the flute).

Did you mean m. 2 beat 1? Added it there

You might also want to break the beam across beats 1-2 of m9/13 RH to match the 2nd page.[/li][/list]

I specifically wanted to keep them like that here since they're part of a separate voice than on beat 1 and I wanted to avoid unbeamed notes being mistaken for a different voice (same as m. 15).