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Submission Archive / Re: [Wii] Nintendo Wii BIOS - "Wii Sounds" by amc
« on: January 10, 2021, 07:33:54 PM »
Looks fantastic! There's one issue; the copyright is outside the margins. I'll just bump it up a bit for you and accept it.

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I used a channel separator to listen to m5/9 and 46/50 since I was having trouble hearing the bass, and I'm pretty certain those Ebs are there (kobbelobbe has them there too, and I think she transcribed from the actual sequence data). As for the chords at the end, it's ultimately up to you but I think the dynamic changes on their own would work fine to represent what's happening in the original.
I had a discussion with Levi previously about channel separation vs original on what I think was a sonic spinball submission. My stance hasn't changed; the full track trumps the channels since that's what you hear in-game. I quite clearly and definitely hear no Eb so that's what I think it should be.

Also yug, your triplet mark is collision with the tempo mark in the PDF

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Submission Archive / Re: [PC] Symphonic Rain - "Secret" by Latios212
« on: January 10, 2021, 03:49:25 AM »
Cool, accepted

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Submission Archive / Re: [PC] Symphonic Rain - "Secret" by Latios212
« on: January 09, 2021, 11:58:24 PM »
RH m31- I don't hear the Ab in the first any of these 3 chords.

That's it, great sheet.

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m6 b2 - F, not a B.
 
I have a large issue with your take on this song; the overuse of RH octaves drives the difficulty up considerably when it honestly doesn't need to. This many parallel 10ths are not fun to play in quick succession. I would recommend just using the octaves for the whole notes, and possibly not at all in the section with the 2nd layer notes, but maybe keep it in places like m60-61. There's some freedom in how you approach making this section playable (detailed in the next paragraph) and it doesn't necessarily require removing the octaves here./

Since your bassline relies on staccato off beat notes, I'm wondering how a performer would hold notes for the indicated length in places like m50-51. I'd suggest either cutting down the layer 1 notes and combining the layers or messing with the octaves to get something more playable.

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Fix the misaligned notes latios mentioned and then I approve

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Alright, sounds good.

Accepting

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here we go
RH:
-I hear an octave harmony (below) in m2. Since there's ped, I don't see a problem with it.
-I don't hear a harmony on m7 b3.
-m9/17 - first 2/all chords should be rolled
-Same for m14/19 b1
Not going to mention all the rolled chord suggestions because it seems you have intentionally excluded them. I still think it's a good idea for the ones that have a very clear separation to try to replicate the music box feel of the song.

2nd layer:
-m14 b2 - I hear the A an octave lower.
-m20 - I hear b2-2.5 an octave higher. Yeah, they might interfere with the perception of the melody here, but they do that in the original too.
-m27 - I don't hear the E strike on b2.5. No strikes there at all, actually.
-m28 b3 - I hear a A here again, not a B.

LH:
-I hear the E super strong in m5, and would recommend moving the C you have up to the E instead.
-m7 - I hear a F# at the beginning of the rolled chord here, below the G.

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I can see a reasoning for not having a pickup measure because of the repeat, but it would honestly look cleaner if it was just a pickup measure honestly.

Everything else is fantastic, as expected. Great sheet.

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The version you posted is missing the last page; this one works better

LH first
-m23 - I hear b3.75 lowest note as a Bb instead of an An
-m75 - I hear a Eb above the chords here too, and it sounds more prominent than the Bb to me. Also in m83 and similar

RH:
Dots on the dotted half notes are colliding with the 2nd layer in m5 and similar.   
m16b1 needs a grace note

There's a lot of tied notes that don't need to be tied, especially with the measure spacing you have. I would suggest making the 16th-8th pairs that fall on a .25 of a beat a dotted 8th simply for readability. At the very least, go through it again and fix places like b4 of m12, b1 of m25, b4 of m27, etc.

Maybe have some repeat systems? So much of this song is repeated over and over again and you could cut out at least a page or 2.

some 8vbs for the really low LH parts would be nice too

Otherwise, it looks pretty great, glad to see more replacements.

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Submission Archive / Re: [NES] StarTropics - "Dungeon" by stellarlights24
« on: January 07, 2021, 11:07:23 PM »
Numbers in the time sig are bolded and shouldn't be. The numbers were actually written in the text font, not the number font so it was super easy to fix

Everything else looks great so I'll just fix that and accept it


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Yeah I felt that staccatoing the 16ths doesn't really matter at this speed.

Everything else fixed and no I am not calling it dank dungeons

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Submission Archive / Re: [GCN] Animal Crossing - "6:00 A.M." by Static
« on: January 07, 2021, 11:01:07 PM »
Notes look great , everything looks great.

accepted

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First of all, your tempo mark isn't doing you much good. Edit it, go to the playback, and check the box that says match playback to metronome marking text.

I think the rolled chords are a resonable way to substitute for the pad. But I have 2 suggestions:
a) remove the lowest note in each chord. It doesn't have 1/4 that much low end in it.
b) trim down the RH chord in m13 to make it similar in size and strength to m9.

Otherwise, it looks pretty great.

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indeed it does

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