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Rubikium, I accidentally sent my original feedback post before I was finished with it, but it's done now.

I'd actually prefer 8vb lines here over text prompts. It's just easier to follow and shows the reader exactly what to do.

Done.

- m45-46 RH sounds like you could make each beat two 8th notes instead of one quarter note, with the second 8th note of each beat having only the upper two notes from the previous 8th note.

I had considered this, but I didn't do it for some reason. On second listen it makes sense so I've added it.  I've implemented all your other feedback as well, I just need someone to hide the 8vas for me.

[3DS] Kirby: Planet Robobot - "Time for Dessert!"

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• Composer should just be Hirokazu Ando.
• LH m1-15: All notes falling on beat 2 should be staccato, except in measure 4.
• Many of the LH dyads/notes in measures 1-15 falling on beat 2.5 are inaccurate:
  
  • m1: F# should be moved up an octave.
  • m2: D# should be moved up an octave.
  • m3: Dyad should be an A#dim triad (A#, C#, E).
  • m6: The A# should be a G#-A# dyad.
  • m8: Dyad should have an A# added on top.
  • m11: I think the LH is actually fine, but there should be a triad in the RH on beat 2.5 consisting of A#, C# and D#.
  • m15: Fifth should be filled in with an A# and B#, and should be rolled.
• m8 RH: The whole measure should be 8va, not just the last two notes.
• m9 RH: The melody here should be A#, F#, C#. The same goes for measure 11 and measure 13.
• m14 RH: Dyad on beat 1 should be a triad with notes G#, A# and C#.
• m15: LH beat 1 should be an octave lower. In the RH, the D# on beat 3.5 should have an A# below it.
• m16 RH: Melody note on beat 1 should have a grace note (F#).
• m17 LH: Beat 4.5 dyad should have an E on the bottom instead of a D#.
• m18 RH: All notes should be staccato. Also, I don't think the 8va needs to extend past the first note.
• m19: Notes on beats 1 and 4.5 in the RH should be staccato, in the LH the note on beat 2 should be staccato.
• m20: All notes should be staccato.
• m21: All RH notes should be staccato. Also, it's really hard to hear, but there's a chord in the RH on beat 4.5—sounds like an F# major triad (F#, A#, C#). On beat 1 in the LH, you should just have a dotted half note instead of a half note tied to a quarter note.
• m22: In the RH, the B# on beat 4.5 should have an F# below it.
• m23: In the RH, both dyads should be rolled. All LH notes should be staccato.
• I think mp would work better as a dynamic for this piece, but that's open to interpretation.

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[Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time/Darkness/Sky: "Apple Woods"]

Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time/Darkness/Sky: "Apple Woods"

[MUS] [MIDI] [PDF]

All fixed, although I'm not sure about the harmonies in measures 57 and 59, I'm having trouble hearing them.

Agh, sorry. Fixed.

[Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time/Darkness/Sky: "Apple Woods"]

Here's my submission:

Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time/Darkness/Sky: "Apple Woods"

[MUS] [MIDI] [PDF]

I wasn't sure whether or not to notate the guitar chords, as they require some insane jumps in the left hand, so I've left them out for now. I have a version with them included if people think it'd be good to have them, though. I also considered moving the melody up an octave in measures 45-46 for clarity, let me know if that seems like a good idea or not.

I actually also have a finished sheet of this, believe it or not. I'm totally fine if Sidon wants to submit his arrangement, though.

I'd like to claim Apple Woods (replacement) from PMD Explorers, if that's alright.

Bass doesn't play in m. 1/5/9 beat 4.5

WHAT how did I miss this...Fixed.

I'd suggest removing the staccato in m. 2/10 beat 2.5

Done.

- m. 10: missing the Ab in the second chord like m. 3?

I'm assuming you meant measure 11, in which case you're right. Fixed.

Would recommend making the Eb grace note in m. 14 D# instead

Done.

I think m. 29 would make more sense using Gb instead of F#?

Yeah you're right. Fixed.

Quite sure the last note in m. 16 is an E as written.

Ayyy thanks. I can honestly hear it as either, but an E makes way more sense to me. I was starting to go crazy thinking it was a quarter tone or something...

Distribution of the music on the pages could be improved a bit as well.

Oh yeah I was wondering about this (especially the last page) but since Libera didn't mention it I guess I forgot. Thanks for that.

Updated using Latios' file with all edits made.

-The copyright/url text is too small; it should be size 10, not 8.
-The composer/arranger info should come down a bit so that it's not directly in line with the game name.

Fixed.

The E in the bass at the end of bars 15 and 16 should be an F I think.

I agree with m. 15 but I really think it's an E in m. 16. I guess we'll have to get a third opinion, in the meantime I've done m. 15.

-I think it'd make a lot more sense to have the Fs in bar 13 in with the right hand chords.

Done.

-With regards to the chords at the end, I do think that there's another Eb higher up just underneath the top F.

Sounds right to me. Thanks for that.

-The 8va in bar 37 could start further to the left so that the 8 isn't directly on top of the staccato, which looks a little cluttered.

Fixed...not sure how that happened.

-I'd bring the systems closer together on page 2 so that the music isn't quite so close to the subtitle.  Similarly, on page 3 I'd bring everything down to give the subtitle some more room.

I use Notepad, so I'm not sure I can do these. If someone else could help me out with this I'd appreciate it.

Thanks for the feedback!

When the song repeats, an electric piano plays the melody instead

Yeah, I considered a "mf on repeat" but I decided against it. I think it's fine as is.
Added the arpeggio, let me know if you guys think of anything else.

Updated with all edits made! I opted for rests in measures 1-8 and a tie in the final measure. Let me know if I missed anything.

Some things:

-Chords at m 13 are split between hands because they felt awkward to play with just the right hand (to me anyways)
-Not sure about the really high chords at the end, some notes might be wrong

Thanks! Now I can finally submit this.